*Comment Porn Battle Post* AMTDI/SUV Sex/Solo Sex

[51stcenturyfox]

Hey, it's party time!  Everybody's welcome to kick in some porn!

Yes, three themes this weekend:  Aliens Made Them Do it, Sex in the Torchwood SUV and Solo Sexing!


You can combine or choose one.

1. This should relate to TW or Doctor Who in some way. Crossovers are fine! The SUV counts as a character.
2. It should fit in the comment box. (That's about 500 words, max.) Please put the fandom and pairing in the subject line.
Example: Torchwood  Jack/Tosh 
3. If you wish to write something longer, just add a summary or snippet and link to your LJ, or reply to your first comment with extra porn.
4. WIP snippets are fine, but the story shouldn't be published earlier - the Battles are for new sexy things. :)  
5. Anon commenting is turned on with screening, in case you prefer to be anonymous.
6. Any ship-war sniping/negativity will be deleted.

Give posters a chance to edit, etc. before replying to a porn post, please.  You know how that ruddy preview thing works (badly).

Any issues/queries-  just message Andreth or Foxy.  Chat/Discussion thread here. Soundtrack by andreth47  (click pop-out player to keep the stream up in a new window).

 

Comments

Re: Torchwood Gwen/Tosh 2 of 2

[blue-fjords.livejournal.com]

Well, you and foxy let the cat out of the bag, but yes, this is recognizable as you! Although look at you, writing about Tosh and Gwen this time! :) For such a brief piece, you really got a handle on the two of them. And what an interesting scenario!
I like all the little details here: the sound of the fingernails, the pattern of the rain, Ianto brushing Gwen's hair behind her ear.
(Oh, and in case you were wondering, this is the line that really stands out as being written by you: The steady patter of the rain on windbreaker hoods beat out a headache now, and the water still slid in just at the side and drenched the neckline of the shirt. Then I went and looked back at your post and sure enough, that's the line that stood out to sang, too. I've picked out misswinterhill's stuff from anonymous postings, too, but I don't think I could recognize other people's stuff. Maybe vera's as well. The three of you have very distinctive themes and styles.)

Re: Torchwood Gwen/Tosh 2 of 2

[cruentum.livejournal.com]

Yeah. And sang listed all the reasons why that particular line stood out, mostly to me it stands out that it fails at consistent tense there, but the part she noticed was

a) interaction of inanimate objects (rain on windbreaker hoods)
b) turns of phrase (on windbreaker hoods beats out a headache now)
c) use of the definite article when it could/should be a personal pronoun (drenched the neckline of the shirt)

The latter is a bit of a weakness since it creates distance to the character when I don't necessarily want to induce distance, and it's something I'm generally more conscious of these days when writing because sang pointed it out often enough in beta but it obviously still slips in. LOL

But hey, thanks, Gwen is certainly not someone who naturally comes to mind for me to write, so am glad it worked for you.